I'm surprised I hadn't seen a story with Harry having a natural affinity for the Mind Arts. (Probably a 4 for people who have a higher tolerance than I for protagonists with mental disabilities) Ultimately, one can't help but feel that the narrative spends so much time on Harry's friendships and the armchair psychology behind them that it forgets about its original premise. When you get to third year it's remarked that Harry is pulling away from his peers in terms of magical ability, despite the fact that he isn't doing anything different to what he was doing before, nor has he had any new revelation that fundamentally deepens his connection to magic etc. The author has Harry's magical skills accelerate in unexplained ways. But we don't really have any idea of what it is that Harry is improving on, if not knowledge/understanding. Yes, he has natural talent, but that still needs to be honed somehow, because otherwise he would already be the complete Voldemort-beating package at age 11. With that removed, Harry's superior magical ability has no real source to explain it. the author makes Hermione better at magical theory than Harry but Harry better at casting magic, thus removing "knowledge and understanding of magic" as the source of Harry's superiority. The author doesn't really put any work into depicting how Harry is better at magic than everyone else, and indeed in some areas actively sabotages this point. None of his acquisition of this skill was shown.
One scene Harry expresses an interest in spell creation, and a few scenes later he has already created his first spell. The author skips over a number of important "milestone" items, such as spell creation. The problem is that the author hasn't put much flesh on the bones of Harry's magical talent. There's one other aspect to this which is disappointing, which is that it fails on its fundamental premise: that of depicting a talented Harry (particularly in the mind arts). I have little patience for panic attacks etc. (It's also a theme which is common in slash fics). Writing is competent but unfortunately I can't get past the characterisation of Harry - "magically strong, emotionally weak" is a theme I particularly dislike. Honestly, one of the best finds in the fandom for a long time for me. Nor did it "turn him into a puddle of angst". The first chapter throws a massive red flag in the form of physical abuse by the Dursleys which, while shapes him, is never really mentioned again. Harry himself is very competent if not socially somewhat inept? Or rather, he relies on legilimency for most of his social interactions.īe warned though. The more this story goes on, the more its revealed just show AU this story is.
Some grammatical mistakes but nothing major. Romance is basically non-existent at this point because so far, the story just reached Third Year. The focus seems to be a lot of Harry and his ability to use legilimency at an early age. Summary: What is more terrifying? A wizard who can kick down your door or a wizard who can look at you and know your every thought? Harry's journey into the mind arts begins with a bout of accidental magic and he practices it and hungers for the feelings it brings.Īn excellent AU story so far.
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